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Backstory:

James Hearte's plan to start a major independent federation looked to be going according to schedule when WWE suffered a minor crisis. Mr. Hearte's low key moves to have government officials aid his goals had worked in a way he hadn't planned. His attempts to enforce an old law, which required wrestling promotions to allow their wrestlers to become real independent contractors had led a few officials to investigate the manner that Vince was running WWE.

As the statue of limitations had run out on most, if not all of his crimes, Mr. McMahon knew he was in no real danger. He knew he'd be forced to undergo another brief trial, however. As it wouldn't be as brief as most the promotion's power structure needed to change for a couple of months, so as to downplay the effects of his absence. Steph took over the creative aspects of his job, with Shane and Linda taking on extra offscreen duties.

To prevent a downturn in business, which might occur with Stephanie not being able to do her job to her usual high standards, WWE made quick moves to hire a bunch of Hearte's start up's wrestlers. The move seemed to have also eliminated the promotions possible threat, which unofficially WWE might have been leery of, as they were close to having both T.V. time and what they considered to be Big Stars, of some type. It was also ironic, considering that Hearte's legal ploys were to have shortly had WWE wrestlers escaping from their contracts to work with him.

It was even more ironic, considering that to fill Stephanie's old creative job they attempted to hire Hearte himself, when unknown to them, it was unintentionally his fault that these things had to happen! For that reason, James didn't know if he could morally accept the job. He eventually decided that he could make them enough money and/or good shows to make it better for them that he did this.

Besides. He wouldn't let a third Bradshaw PPV title match occur in a row. That alone was worth all the trouble he caused Vince.

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At the Great American Bash, Eddie was looking like he was in trouble after the interference of the invincible VINCE MCMAHON. The Boss was back, and he was making his presence known to help J.B.L.! Layfield tagged three of the turnbuckles, and was about to make Arquette's title reign much less laughable when some infamous music hit.

Static crackled... Cue the porno sounding music! Out from the back ran (And walked at a slow pace to not injure themselves) Kevin Nash, Scott Hall, Lex Luger, Buff Bagwell, and HOLLYWOOD HULK HOGAN!

Hogan went straight for Vinnie Mac, as Hall and Buff took out The Furer! They then dragged Eddie to each turnbuckle, while beating him. After they had his unconscious body tag the fourth one they threw his and Bradshaw's attached carcasses out of the ring. Hollywood took a house mic.

Hogan: We're all sick and tired of waiting in the shadows while you ruin what we made. Professional wrestling is the legacy of ME, Hollywood Hulk Hogan! Nobody desecrates it but US!

Nash: We were all sitting at home-

Buff: In our mansions.

Nash: In our mansions, watching T.V. when we saw Bradshaw was getting a title shot. Why in God's name would that piece of Texas trash getting anything is insane, but then he can't even get the job done!

Hall: So what does Kurt do, but give him a rematch. Damnit, where's OUR rematches!?

(Lex nods)

Hogan: That got me and my brothers mad, dudes! when the biggest name - the biggest names in the HISTORY of this sport are sitting in our extravagantly large homes when they've got main events that couldn't sell at a five cent flee mart, something's gotta be done!

Hall: Who ya gonna call?

Luger: The only people who can do the job.

(Hall and Luger carefully climbed out of the ring. Hall searched around under the ring for something. He took a spraypaint can.)

Hall(Off mic this could be heard, as he smiled): Just where I left it.

(Nash and Buff roll Vince over, onto his back. Hall starts spraypainting something on him.)

Hogan: Me and my boys got back together. The BIGGEST ICONS IN WRESTLING got back together! WHATCHA GONNA DO!? We're taking back THE WORLD!!!

(The camera fades out, as the crowd is cheering off the wall for these big and unadvertised stars, who made the show miles better then they'd believed it was going to be, as it shows, written on Vince's back "nWo")

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WWE Smackdown! roster

Heels

Babyfaces

AKIO

BIG SHOW

BILL DeMOTT

BILLY GUNN

BILLY KIDMAN

BOOKER T

BUBBA RAY DUDLEY

BUFF BAGWELL

CHARLIE HAAS

CHAVO GUERRERO

D-VON DUDLEY

DANNY BASHAM

DAWN MARIE

DOUG BASHAM

EDDIE GUERRERO

FUNAKI

HARDCORE HOLLY

HOLLYWOOD HULK HOGAN

JACQUELINE

JAMIE NOBLE

JOHN CENA

JOHN BRADSHAW LAYFIELD

JOHNNY STAMBOLI

JOSH MATTHEWS

KENZO SUZUKI

KEVIN NASH

KURT ANGLE

LEX LUGER

MARK JINDRAK

MICHAEL COLE

MISS JACKIE

MORDECAI

NUNZIO

ORLANDO JORDAN

PAUL BEARER

PAUL HEYMAN

PAUL LONDON

RENE DUPREE

REY MYSTERIO

RICO

RIKISHI

ROB VAN DAM

SABLE

SAKODA

SCOTT HALL

SCOTTY 2 HOTTY

SHANNON MOORE

SPIKE DUDLEY

TAZZ

THEODORE LONG

TORRIE WILSON

UNDERTAKER

Teams:

Akio & Sakoda

Billy Kidman & Paul London

Billy Gunn & Hardcore Holly

Rico & Charlie Haas

Scotty 2 Hotty & Rikishi

The Basham Brothers

The Dudley Boyz

The F.B.I.(Full Blooded Italians)

The Outsiders

Totally Buff

Managers - Clients:

Paul Bearer(Kidnapped) - The Undertaker

Paul Heyman - The Dudley Boyz, The Undertaker

Theodore Long - Mark Jindrak

Champions:

WWE Champion: Eddie Guerrero

WWE United States Champion: John Cena

WWE Tag Team Champions: Rico & Charlie Haas

WWE Cruiserweight Champion: Rey Mysterio

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---Mr. Hearte was entering WWE Headquarters, Titan Towers, just as the former Chairman, Vince McMahon, was exiting. Vince told Hearte that something like he had total control in his creative job, which wasn't entirely true. As Mr. McMahon's limo drove off, James Hearte thought that he would need to remind WWE of that when time came for him to ask for The A-Train's return to Smackdown!. Hearte had been a long time fan of that superb wrestler, and knew he'd be able to think of a lot of stuff for and with him.

Later, in his first major meeting of the new Regime he was apprised of some possible Cruiserweights to hire, and be allocated from RAW. In addition the hiring of another medical personal was believed needed. Mr. Hearte agreed with all plans, but decided to save the final work until after Smackdown!.---

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WWE Smackdown! (July 1st)

Preview!

In the first episode of WWE Smackdown! since the enormous events of The Great American Bash, the five men who interfeared in the main event title match, Scott Hall, Kevin Nash, Buff Bagwell, Lex Luger, and Hollywood Hulk Hogan will be in the house, as agreed to by Smackdown! General Manager Kurt Angle, and will give their explinations!

Also RVD and Rene Dupree will team up to take on their other opponents in the U.S. title match, at the Great American Bash, Booker T. and John Cena!

Akio & Sakoda will fight the team of Billy Gunn & Hardcore Holly, and the Cruiserweight Championship will be on the line!

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I liked the backstory, but didn't much care for bringing back nWo. And how is the Cruiserweight title on the line in a tag match?

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I liked the backstory, but didn't much care for bringing back nWo.  And how is the Cruiserweight title on the line in a tag match?

I don't think it meant it that way.

And I'm not keen on bringing the nWo back, the only one worth it is Hall, and he usually falls back into his drinking problem when he wrestles.

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Agreed - Scott Hall's weakness is, honestly, very funny.

But, as bizarre as his diaries often are, Hearte's do end up being very entertaining, more often than not. I expect to see a return of the Show-Train Chronicles, or you're getting buried, boy.

RK!

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My apoligies for the confusion. The Cruiserweight belt will be on the line in a different bout.

To those of you who aren't fans of the nWo, don't worry. I plan to push Paul London. So, love me, ok?

And, thanks Mark. I'll just have to see if Steph'll let me bring The Artist formerly known as Albert back.

The show will definitely be up today. I actually wrote it and everything. That suprised me a litte, since my usual policy is to post a backstory and then quit. This is a good sign...

I'd be posting it now, but I'd like to give people a bit more time to read the initial stuff.

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My apoligies for the confusion. The Cruiserweight belt will be on the line in a different bout.

To those of you who aren't fans of the nWo, don't worry. I plan to push Paul London. So, love me, ok?

And, thanks Mark. I'll just have to see if Steph'll let me bring The Artist formerly known as Albert back.

The show will definitely be up today. I actually wrote it and everything. That suprised me a litte, since my usual policy is to post a backstory and then quit. This is a good sign...

I'd be posting it now, but I'd like to give people a bit more time to read the initial stuff.

James, if you've got a show, post it. This diary's not on Page 6, I think people can catch up if they want to.

And The Dome is where the best writers thrive and the criticism is harsh, so it's gonna take a bit more than pushing Paul London to keep people off your back if you can't deliver. And admitting that you usually write a backstory then quit just puts a bullseye on you.

Me personally, I dig an nWo return...but Bagwell and Luger are two steps below useless, and always have been. (Well, OK, Luger was alright...in the '80s.) Good luck, and if you don't keep one going, God help you.

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Hehe. Don't worry, chico. Since I'm going to be out for a few hours I'm about to post it.

However, as I've been doing journals, some sucessful, since the classic pre-Kliq era of late 2002, I can attest that journals that move way to fast for their readers almost alwys die.

Quite frankly, I'm not sure that I should post it within 24 hours, but as a show of good will to people who don't know my work I will.

BTW, I'm glad you love Mr. London.. :) don't worry.

EDIT: Actually, I got too cocky there. I forgot to actually book the show in EWR, so I won't have time to post it before I go. I'm sorry folks for getting your hopes up. I'll make it up to you guys by booking velocity later this week.

Adios!

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Hehe. Don't worry, chico. Since I'm going to be out for a few hours I'm about to post it.

However, as I've been doing journals, some sucessful, since the classic pre-Kliq era of late 2002, I can attest that journals that move way to fast for their readers almost alwys die.

Quite frankly, I'm not sure that I should post it within 24 hours, but as a show of good will to people who don't know my work I will.

BTW, I'm glad you love Mr. London.. :) don't worry.

EDIT: Actually, I got too cocky there. I forgot to actually book the show in EWR, so I won't have time to post it before I go. I'm sorry folks for getting your hopes up. I'll make it up to you guys by booking velocity later this week.

Adios!

I don't wanna sound like a dick but JUST POST THE FUCKING SHOW ALREADY. You've filled this thread with enough shit already and now your just building up anticipation to the show and making people expect a great show from you which i frankly can't see happening so post a show and get this diary going before it gets fucked up.

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I don't wanna sound like a dick but JUST POST THE FUCKING SHOW ALREADY. You've filled this thread with enough shit already and now your just building up anticipation to the show and making people expect a great show from you which i frankly can't see happening so post a show and get this diary going before it gets fucked up.

You call responding to fan reactions shit/crap? If so, then my advice for you is to not post. Negative feedback is one thing, but negative feedback about responding to negative feedback in a way where I try to understand your concerns better seems rather silly. One of my dislikes of many diary writers is how they crave feedback and yet never address any of their fans complements, questions, or even putdowns. I'm not one who begs for blind praise from others, consdiering that If I feel my work to not be entertaining it won't me feel any better. However, I do feel that if people take the time to leave something of value in my topics that I should reply. Had no one else posted in this than my first show would have been on the third fourth or fifth post.

As to the nWo critisisms, it's a matter of personal taste, I'd say. In most of my journals I never give the main pushes to flippy floppy "good" wrestlers. One thing that the nWo had was charisma, and that, I feel translates better to a journal, than good matches do. As a result my matches will often be brief, or just the finish covered.

I also understand that financially it's a poor move to hire Nash, Hall, Bagwell, and Luger, however, it's not too much of a stretch to believe they'd be brought in. I'm using them, because I have respect for their characters, and I feel that they still have stories left to be tell. If this journal lasts a while I hope to tell some of them. Also, Smackdown!'s current roster is so weak that I do not believe anyone could do a good journal with no changes.

I seem to be rambling, so I'll just post the show now. If there are any critisms of it please be clear as to what changes you think should be made, in your opinion.

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WWE Smackdown!

UPN 8:00 July 1st 2004

(Taped June 29th 2004, Fayetteville, North Carolina)

The show started off with a video of the main event becoming the nWo's rebirth.

("Ready or not, here I come" played. Scott Hall strutted down to the ring, slowly.)

("Buff Daddy" brought forth Buff Bagwell at a similarly slow pace. Cole and Tazz explained that General Manager Angle has given the nWo the ability to come here tonight and to explain their actions.)

(Lex was next to take his time coming down. He kept posing to admire himself as he goes. The announcers also reiterated that Bradshaw was too badly hurt, from his PPV beating, to be here tonight, and also Eddie was too hurt to be here, but the WWE Champion would be back, and make his presence known/felt, next week!)

(Nash entered fourth, to more fanfare then the previous two.)

(Finally the tune of Voodoo Child played, and the Biggest Icon in Wrestling made his way out to the largest reaction yet!)

-66%

[Commercials]

Hogan: In case you dudes haven't guessed it we're the -

All: NEW WORLD ORDER!

Hogan: Damn right, brothers. We're the nWo, the new World order of wrestling, back at last. changes need to be made, and we're the only men for the job. Let me introduce this dude, Scott Hall. He's been with us since day one, and was screwed out of this company by "mister" McMahon and Riccy Flair, two dude who don't know one damn thing about nWo glory.

(Scott wiped away a false tear.)

Hall: Thank you, thank you Hollywood. And this here is the Total Package, former WCW Champion, Lex Luger.

(Lex poses)

Hall: And this chico, well, tell them about yourself.

Bagwell: I'm Buff, I'm the stuff, and the giiirls just can't get enough.

Hall: And what's more, he is the single greatest most talented wrestler to have never held a singles title. Because those front office bean counters always made sure that he was SCREWED! Now, here's my best friend, he's had my back since I was almost as big a nobody as all of you. We're buds. We're Kliq! BIG SEXY KEVIN NASH!

Nash: Big Sexay's in the HOOOOOOOOOOOOOUSE!

Hall: This man held the WWF title longer then ANY MAN in the PAST - 14 - YEARS! Yeah, blow that, Randy.

(Kevin Nash stood, looking imposing.)

Hall: And then, words just aren't enough for this man, this man right here! The man who single handily brought professional wrestling from vacant smoky bars to the multibillion dollar industry of today! 14 time World Champion, HOLLYWOOD HULK HOGAN!

Hogan: And, Whatcha gonna do, now that the Big Bad is back. We're large, we're in charge, and we're taking over EVERYTHING! Our first order of business is getting some gold around our waists. Tonight, Rico and Charlie Haas can go and live out their dream of living in the Castro, as The Outsiders, Kevin Nash and Scott Hall take the nWo Tag Team Championships back home! John Cena's basic thuganomics ain't gonna stop Buff Bagwell from finally getting his championship! The U.S. Championship'll be where it belongs, around Buff Daddy's waist! Rey Rey can make like a lawn dart and fly right out of the Cruiserweight Championship picture, 'cause Lex Luger's coming at 'cha!

Luger: I've been on a diet.

(That statement lead Michael Cole to forcefully argue the contrary, but then, considering the past two champs, Luger with it isn't that hard to believe.)

Hogan: And as for you Eddie, YOU'RE MINE! I'm gonna take the title that I made back and show you that the beating you took yesterday was just the first taste of your new beginning! The new beginning for everyone! So, Whatcha gonna do, now that the new World organization, the new World order has ARRIVED!

(Cue the porno music and the Pavlovian dogs/fans mixed boos and cheers)

-85%

[Commercials]

"Play it again!"

From the back enters the odd couple team of fan favorite Rob Van Dam and the French Phenom. And Fifi. This match is a result of continuing tension between the four participants of the Great American Bash's fatal four-way match.

"Can You Dig It, SUCKAAAAA!?"

Booker T. then entered alone. While his opponents, an easy going pot smoker and a pro-French pretty boy have no major issues with each other, Booker and his partner have been fighting for weeks.

"So, you think you're untouchable?"

Cena comes to the ring, glaring at everyone. His partner, Booker T. steps down out of the ring.

Cena: Yo yo yo yo yo yo yo-

Cena abruptly hit Dupree with the mic, starting the match early. The crowd didn't seem to mind his lack of a rap that much, considering his rare unique burst of energy.

Nevertheless, his team of mistrust didn't prevail. After several scuffles he laid Booker out with an F-U and walked off, letting Dupree score a victory over the Black Wrestler.

ROB VAN DAM AND RENE DUPREE (W/ Fifi) OVER BOOKER T. AND JOHN CENA

Crowd: 80%

Match: 71%

Overall: 77%

**3/4

[Commercials]

Backstage in Kurt's office Mr. Angle, with his bodyguard Luther behind him, announced that nWo interference would not be allowed in any of the matches or they'd be suspended. Kurt would not allow the nWo to bring down his show! somehow Kurt managed to decree and then say that without seeming too babyfaceish.

-88%

[Commercials]

One of the 'Slam of the Night/Rewind' things showed The Undertaker's confrontation with The Dudleyz at The Great American Bash. It looked like he was going to be and stay free of Paul Heyman, but the nefarious one reasserted his control and dominance over The Urn, thus The Undertaker did not rebel anymore/fully, to the fans disappointment. Cole and Tazz promoted a rare television appearance from The undertaker, next week.

-86%

Back in the arena, "live", '2 z' Top' #2 plays. Jamie Noble entered as usual. For some reason he was accompanied by Kenzo Suzuki's geisha.

Rey Rey then entered to a large reaction. Before the Cruiserweight Championship match could start, however, the Japanese music hit. Suzuki and his carriers came to ringside. That development probably made this match have an interesting dynamic to most of the viewers at home.

The Cruiserweights went on to have a typical mini-heavyweight style match. In the middle Suzuki-san got down. That set up the finish while his interference was countered by Rey Rey, and led to Mysterio gaining the pinfall victory and retaining the title.

REY MYSTERIO OVER JAMIE NOBLE (W/ Kenzo Suzuki and Entorouge) TO RETAIN THE WWE CRUISERWEIGHT CHAMPIONSHIP

Afterwards, Kenzo looked angry, and had his servants carry him away. This probably wouldn't be the end of whatever had just gone down. And if so, it would probably be a definite sign that either Russo or Ferara were hired alongside James Hearte.

Crowd: 72%

Match: 78%

Overall: 75%

***

Helped the belt's image.

[Commercials]

After the break Lex Luger was shown kicking an unconscious Rey Mysterio. They showed a 'During the break' segment that showed him entering through the crowd and attacking the tired Cruiserweight.

The 'Under 225 Pounds' Luger did the 'I want the belt' thing as the show went back to break.

-68%

[Commercials]

The teams of Akio & Sakoda and Billy Gunn & Hardcore Holly were both in the ring as the show came back. The bell rang to start the third bout of the evening. During the semi-pointless match the announcers, mainly Cole, talked about the 'reprehensible' actions of the nWo as of late, including the attack on Rey Rey by 'Cruiserweight Contender' Lex Luger in the previous segment. The Japanese people ended up winning with some cheating. Akio pinned Billy Gunn.

AKIO & SAKODA OVER BILLY GUNN & HARDCORE HOLLY

Elsewhere, the nWo Cam showed the nWo hyping each other up for their main event title match. Then the tag champs were shown preparing.

Crowd: 51%

Match: 69%

Overall: 60%

**

Akio and Sakoda each gained a point of overness.

[Commercials]

(Charlie Haas, Rico, and Miss Jackie were in their respective ring gears, looking looking concerned. Rico looked a bit thoughtful.)

Haas: Tonight we're in our toughest match yet. The Outsiders though brutality, beatdowns, and creating once held the WCW World Tag Team Championship for over a year. These guys are the real deal. We've gotta go in at 100%, and we can't lose focus for one second.

Rico: Well, it wouldn't be too bad...

Haas: What!?

Rico: Moving to the Castro.

(Rico smiled and rubbed Charlie's left shoulder. Hass kinda angrily knocked his hand off.)

Haas: Ri-ico!

(Miss Jackie looked amused as usual.)

Rico: But make no mistake. I will by no matter allow us to lose our WWE Tag Team Championship, Charles. No matter what outfit I'm in, nothing goes better then the Tag Team Gold.

(Rico stroked his belt. He then turned away, toward the door.)

Rico: Let's go.

Haas: That's more like it! Let's get'em!

(The nWo was then shown walking dominantly down a hall, The Outsiders in front. The group was pushing stage hands, who didn't run away, out of the way and/or down, as the five walked. The main event would be NEXT!)

-74%

[Commercials]

The Outsiders music played. The challenging tag team walked down in the front of the nWo group, with Buff, Hogan, and Lex behind them. Hall and Nash entered the ring. The other three members stood in front of it menacingly. By the time the shot had gone back to the ramp, the runway was there, having been moved in there quickly.

"You Look So Good To Me" played. Down came Rico and Jackie over the runway looking more serious then usual. Doing their bit on top, but in a way that showed that they understood the seriousness of their situation. They waited in front of it, staring at totally Buff and Hogan as Charlie Haas walked around it. The ref ordered the nWo trio away, so they walked off to the sides, Lex and Hogan on one, Buff in the front, while giving mock apologies.

Haas and Rico entered the ring and stared the Outsiders down. The match would begin with Charlie Haas versus Scott Hall. The WWE Tag Team Championship match was laid out in a way to solidify Rico & Haas's position as a strong tag team. They got about half of the offense in the short match, although the Outsiders selling was minimal, as was to be expected. Haas got a two count on Hall at one point. Before much of the third count could occur Buff jumped in to break it up.

RICO (W/ Miss Jackie) & CHARLIE HAAS OVER THE OUTSIDERS VIA DQ TO RETAIN THE WWE TAG TEAM CHAMPIONSHIP

Right afterwards all four other nWo members jumped into attack Haas. Rico tried to make a save, but ended up in a multiple man beatdown himself. Miss Jackie climbed on the ropes and slapped Hogan. She got pushed down, as a result.

Cena's music hit and he, followed by Van Dam ran out. That evened things a bit, but the power of numbers won out. Smackdown! ended with Buff having spraypainted Cena, and was standing victorious with his fellow nWo members above the fallen WWE babyfaces. The announcers also previewed next week with the nWo going to be in the house 'and who knows what they'll do!', a special rare television appearance by The Undertaker, and the WWE Champion, Eddie Guerrero returning, having promised to make his presence felt!

Crowd: 78%

Match: 60%

Overall: 72%

**

Nash could have sold better. But if he avoided getting injured, consider this match a success.

Overall Show: 73%

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You call responding to fan reactions shit/crap? If so, then my advice for you is to not post. One of my dislikes of many diary writers is how they crave feedback and yet never address any of their fans complements, questions, or even putdowns. I'm not one who begs for blind praise from others, consdiering that If I feel my work to not be entertaining it won't me feel any better. However, I do feel that if people take the time to leave something of value in my topics that I should reply. Had no one else posted in this than my first show would have been on the third fourth or fifth post.

As to the nWo critisisms, it's a matter of personal taste, I'd say. In most of my journals I never give the main pushes to flippy floppy "good" wrestlers. One thing that the nWo had was charisma, and that, I feel translates better to a journal, than good matches do. As a result my matches will often be brief, or just the finish covered.

I also understand that financially it's a poor move to hire Nash, Hall, Bagwell, and Luger, however, it's not too much of a stretch to believe they'd be brought in. I'm using them, because I have respect for their characters, and I feel that they still have stories left to be tell. If this journal lasts a while I hope to tell some of them. Also, Smackdown!'s current roster is so weak that I do not believe anyone could do a good journal with no changes.

I seem to be rambling, so I'll just post the show now. If there are any critisms of it please be clear as to what changes you think should be made, in your opinion.

This is known as postwhoring when you do it EVERY time someone makes a comment. You've been told this before in other threads where you or your cronies have done this. For someone who seems intelligent, I'd hope you can comprehend this by now.

Luger as a Cruiserweight just reeks of a lack of originality as no one would buy that. It was mildly funny when Matt Hardy did it since he bordered the weight class, Luger is at least 250 even in his slimmed down build lately. If you're just going to have the nWo run wild, why not have Buff Bagwell take that title? And if you don't want to write matches out, it's better to just not do them than write a piss poor 2 line summary.

I didn't like your original show or how you've handled yourself so far, so I'll be taking a pass on coming back.

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I will agree with naiwf on the fact that I dislike how you have 2 paragraphs on the entry and exits to/from the ring, but just 2-3 lines summing up the match. Your lack of mentioning who was commentating, plus the "'Slam of the Night/Rewind' things" didn't really show you know what you're talking about.

But on a side note: Why is it postwhoring for James to reply to a comment, but not postwhoring for all of us to make them in the first place?

Nobody here has offered up any CONSTRUCTIVE criticism. James has done more constructive criticism of his diary than the rest of the posters in here put together.

To be totally fair, I quote from the Diary Dome Rules:

Nothing upsets me more than reading that line from a diary writer or one of his buddies after some constructive criticism has been offered that you didn't like. If the members of The Dome don't like it, be prepared they WILL call you on it, as well they should. If you need nothing but praise and affirmation, head to .400 Studios and post a diary there. In The Diary Dome, we comment, we critique, and we tell you when it is crap. Be prepared to not be happy if you post something that is awful and can't take criticism that I can almost always assure you is meant to help you become a better contributer to The Dome.
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Meeting #2:

This started with an overview of the last show's performance.

"We got a 5.41 rating for 'Smackdown!'!

The attendance level was 4004 people.

We made $160160 from ticket sales."

The show's massive ratings boost appeared erroneous. Odds were that it had something to do with the new Nelson's rating system. The attendance did seem lacking. The Hearte regime has not been blame, however, as it's been too soon for the ticket sales to reflect his product entirely.

WWE RAW has cut a few members from their roster and staff. Some of the more popular names has made the Smackdown! roster dismayed to see their friends jobless. Apparently they're also worried that these cutbacks will come on their side as well soon. That remains to be seen.

In some hiring news the Internet seems abuzz with news of both brands hiring Steve Austin. Officially the word is that he won't be brought to either, though.

The medical issue has been dealt with, with the hiring of Michael Leisner, who is apparently very proficient. Hopefully that will help keep the roster healthy. Considering how many SD! wrestlers have a penchant for going down to injuries, the easier it is for them the better.

In an attitude issue Billy Gunn & Hardcore Holly didn't feel that they should be jobbing to Akio & Sakoda. Plans weren't changed for them, though, as Akio & Sakoda's push was too important to be changed on their whims, and neither wrestler would be hurt by jobbing on SD! to them.

Also, Ultimo Dragon's release has been finalized. New Creative member James Hearte wishes the Dragon well, and hopes that he may be able to possibly boost conditions so that he'd like to return, in the future.

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To address naiwf's issues.

Actually, no, I hadn't realised that yet. At every other board I've gone to that isn't the case, and the rules on this board did not say that. If someone had told me of that unwritten rule before I wouldn't have been doing so. In the future I'll keep my official replies to the end of some IC post.

Addressing non ediquite issues, to each his own, I suppose. If you haven't been watching Smackdown! lately, the title's already become a joke. Keep in mind it's not 100% verified that Rey Rey will lose, tho. After all, I've already promised you guys a Paul London push! :-P Nevertheless, I'll consider not making Luger's issue with Rey Rey too long.

I take offence to your view of my matches, though. I'm not a fan of doing long ones, but that's a style issue, not one of execution. But if you're not reading further, that's for the best. One would hope you'll think about it later and come back, but I'm not going to force you. After all, I don't read most journals that don't entertain me either.

And, thank you oldskool. I've been trying to follow that, but it's been hard when the complaints coming to me have been about me actually repling to feedback to try to fit in better! It's kinda a damned if I do reply to them, for it'll be consdiered postwhoring, as well as damned if I don't, for it'll seem like I'm ignoring issues that people have.

Hopefully these troubles will stop once people realise that I'm determined to make this journal the best that I believe possible.

Also, I do feel kinda bad that I've usually had complaints with the last of detailed matches in my journals, however, I know that I'd never be able to write them all, as I'm not a fan of write-off matches. If anyone's interested in writing longer ones that I'll plug in I'd be open to that possible solution. Or if anyone else has an idea for making matches I'd like to know those.

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A tugboat full of bullshit

You call responding to fan reactions shit/crap?

I don't know what is funnier. That you try and disguise your blatent postwhoring and disregard for the rules by attempting to villify the very people you claim to be reacting to...

Or that you are deluded enough to believe that you have funs. Here's a free hint, you don't, you're just another annoying dipshit coming straight out of pre-school who believes himself to be the shit.

To your credit, you smell the part.

If so, then my advice for you is to not post.

Irony thy name is James Hearte.

Hey, you clueless waste of hydrogen. That's the message behind the posts being fired at you. If you want to post a diary, post a diary. If you want to have a conversation then use the PM system.

At this point I wouldn't even bother, since your show was not original, well written, or worthy of the amount of shameless delay and whoring you supplied it with.

So, my advice for you is to not post.

And buy a gun.

And swallow it.

And then to discharge it.

Negative feedback is one thing, but negative feedback about responding to negative feedback in a way where I try to understand your concerns better seems rather silly.

You know what seems rather silly, at least to the rational and logical man?

That you have a show done, and decide not to post it.

Do you work? No, you're probably 14. Okay, when you go to school, and the teacher gives you an asignment and you write it... do you hand it in, or do you waste time bullshiting with your friends and explaining what you did and why? I'm guessing the latter, so I'll give you another free piece of advice, and that's to make sure you can beat up your parents because they are otherwise going to kick your ass when you get kicked out of school.

There's an expression, that money talks and bullshit walks. When you post a show and it's good, you hook a reader. When people have to scroll through three pages of bullshit to get to your first entry, they walk. Simple concept. Believe it or not, bumping it up with throwaway posts does not make it more appealing.

One of my dislikes of many diary writers is how they crave feedback and yet never address any of their fans complements, questions, or even putdowns.

That's funny, because one of my dislikes of diary writers is how they crave feedback so they continually bump their diaries by replying to every bit minuta with more irrelevant garbage when they could just as easily post a show. I dislike how diary writers who get putdown by me often continue to write diaries despite not improving either their writing ability or ettiquette and respect. I dislike the fact that idiots like you are born a dime a dozen and more arrive everyday.

I'm not one who begs for blind praise from others, consdiering that If I feel my work to not be entertaining it won't me feel any better.

You are the one who begs for blind praise, because YOU ARE ASKING FOR FEEDBACK WITHOUT A SHOW EVEN BEING POSTED. You continually bump this topic and whore it out to e2o abortion poster childs who bump it with even more irrelevancy. YOU NEED TO EITHER PUT UP OR SHUT UP. So far you have encouraged useless commentary and delivered a show that was completely unrealistic and frankly reeks of amatuer fantasy booking. Take that shit back to e2o, we want quality over quantity here.

However, I do feel that if people take the time to leave something of value in my topics that I should reply.

I am unsuprised.

And largely unimpressed.

Had no one else posted in this than my first show would have been on the third fourth or fifth post.

Unless you have an absolutely mamooth backstory, like my penis length or larger, there is no excuse for your second post being anything other then a show.

And to say that your backstory was lacking would be like saying that sometimes the motives of politicans can be dubious. That was possibly the most unimaginative piece of slap together literary masturbation I have ever seen. You manipulate the WWE to the point of federal lawsuit and then they hire you. YEAH FUCKING RIGHT. It's like radical Islam electing Ariel Sharon as their new spirital leader. It doesn't make an iotta of sense. Beyond the fact that it's just stupidly unrealistic, the writing is uninpsired. Here's a sample of your "rivetting fiction".

James Hearte's plan to start a major independent federation looked to be going according to schedule when WWE suffered a minor crisis.

That's right. His plan was going according to plan.

But we aren't told what this plan is. When he started it. We are kept in the dark.

And his plan is going according to schedule, and then he quits and works for the WWE.

What happens to the fed? The wrestlers? Do they starve? Did you ever have any wrestlers, or did you use computer animation to pretend you did? Was there hardcore porn spliced into your shows? Was it a deathmatch fed?

We don't know, because you can't be bothered to even attempt to write details at all. It's the most boring piece of bullshit that has hit the diary dome since the last time one of you e2o clowns tried to pass this shit as acceptable, and we didn't buy it then either.

As to the nWo critisisms, it's a matter of personal taste, I'd say.

*vigerous shaking of head, and repeated bangings into desk*

In most of my journals I never give the main pushes to flippy floppy "good" wrestlers. One thing that the nWo had was charisma, and that, I feel translates better to a journal, than good matches do.

Even when being attacked for having a shitty diary, you continue to plug it. Were you voted most likely to become an obnoxious, ego masturbating asshole at graduation or something?

As a result my matches will often be brief, or just the finish covered.

Ugh. Why even bother to defend this diary when you don't ever have the decency to write it properly?

I also understand that financially it's a poor move to hire Nash, Hall, Bagwell, and Luger, however, it's not too much of a stretch to believe they'd be brought in.

They are over the hill bad workers and the last time they were brought in, the stable and the workers failed miserably.

Bringing in the nWo is about a big of a stretch as calling this diary good, so it doesn't really suprise me that you would do it.

I'm using them, because I have respect for their characters, and I feel that they still have stories left to be tell. If this journal lasts a while I hope to tell some of them.

If you continue like this the chances of this diary not being closed within a week is about negative 467.

Also, Smackdown!'s current roster is so weak that I do not believe anyone could do a good journal with no changes.

Translation: Beyond being a bad writer with no understanding of the concepts of originallity, realism, or quality, I also do not know the meaning of the word effort.

I seem to be rambling, so I'll just post the show now.

I've heard that before. In this thread, as a matter of fact.

If there are any critisms of it please be clear as to what changes you think should be made, in your opinion.

There are three ways to fix this diary and improve the dome.

Change it from open to closed.

Move it from the diary dome to the archives.

And change your status from alive to buried in the woods.

I'd settle for the first two.

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Are you now incompetent?

That show is not to be confused with a show that people actually put EFFORT into. I mean at least tell us what happens in the match. For all we know, they could have done the tango or sang Michael Jackson songs for the whole match. We have NO idea what happened. It really doesn't take much to write a match if you have a basic knowledge of wrestling moves. I am getting damn sick and tired of you saying "I'm pushing Paul London" to justify your bad decisions. Hell WWE has Eddie Guerrero as it's champion on Smackdown. Does that mean their pushing of JBL is forgiven? HELL NO!!!!! Your idea of making Luger a cruiserweight is pathetic. Luger is too muscle bound to even portray a Cruiserweight. You have totally put 0 effort into this diary and if you can't write a match then you shouldn't be doing diaries. Plus you showed no plot advancement at ALL, it was mostly a show with the nWo walking around the building. Just take your damn time with a show and it may actually be somewhat decent but right this is nothing but a steaming pile of crap. O yeah and as I said earlier your little "I'm pushing Paul London" to justify your bad booking is a cop out and a HORRIBLE cop out at that. We don't care who you push as long as you can justify their push by building them up as a solid contender. So your little cop out stands pathetic. Smarten up with your booking because that's what makes a diary along with matches and you are 0 for 0 with those buddy. Also, you aren't going to find anyone to write matches for you so just put some of this into it EFFORT (I know you're going to have to find your family dictionary to find out what it means). A little EFFORT goes a LONG way in making a diary work. So far, you are showing no effort at all.

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You call responding to fan reactions shit/crap? If so, then my advice for you is to not post. Negative feedback is one thing, but negative feedback about responding to negative feedback in a way where I try to understand your concerns better seems rather silly. One of my dislikes of many diary writers is how they crave feedback and yet never address any of their fans complements, questions, or even putdowns. I'm not one who begs for blind praise from others, consdiering that If I feel my work to not be entertaining it won't me feel any better. However, I do feel that if people take the time to leave something of value in my topics that I should reply. Had no one else posted in this than my first show would have been on the third fourth or fifth post.

As to the nWo critisisms, it's a matter of personal taste, I'd say. In most of my journals I never give the main pushes to flippy floppy "good" wrestlers. One thing that the nWo had was charisma, and that, I feel translates better to a journal, than good matches do. As a result my matches will often be brief, or just the finish covered.

I also understand that financially it's a poor move to hire Nash, Hall, Bagwell, and Luger, however, it's not too much of a stretch to believe they'd be brought in. I'm using them, because I have respect for their characters, and I feel that they still have stories left to be tell. If this journal lasts a while I hope to tell some of them. Also, Smackdown!'s current roster is so weak that I do not believe anyone could do a good journal with no changes.

I seem to be rambling, so I'll just post the show now. If there are any critisms of it please be clear as to what changes you think should be made, in your opinion.

The reason i called your posts 'crap' was because other then a few facts you didn't give us anything to post about. If you posted a show straight away we could see where your going and give you feedback on that but you just started to post a little reply and the same old 'I've got my show ready but I'll post it when i want'. Why would you wanna do that? the only way people can give you any kind of real feedback is after you start posting shows and responding to people that we're going to have less of JBL and more Paul London is just bollocks. In a diary i couldn't give a shit who is pushed to the top as long as the way they are pushed there is semi-realistic and more importantly realistic. Your just trying to get people to read your diary by using that as a motto, sorry but this is the Diary Dome and it doesn't work like that.

Now onto the show, after reading through your first show i can tell i was correct in my first statement, the promo's sound nothing like who their supposed to sound like. The matches are just horrid, the entrances are even longer then the matches. Would it be that hard to simply add a couple of lines onto the match adding a little bit more of a description. I'm not asking for paragraphs of detail but a little would seriously help. The format is OK but could be improved, use Bold/Italic more wisely and add in a little bit of color to liven up the show. I absolutely detest the Luger dropping to CW Title level angle you've got going, it's just appalling and so far beyond the realms of realistic it's just unbelievable. No reader would in their right mind believe this especially with the him having only a month or so to lose the weight. It's just ridiculous.

Also i know it's the debut of the NWO but IMO you gave them too much time on the camera making everything else on SD look 2 bit behind them. Even the World Champion was made to look under them. Also it would have helped if you had a Angle/NWO confrontation which would have cemented the NOW taking over status you've got going. This is what I've slightly picked out from your opening show and i shudder to think what i might uncover if i go more deeply into it so I'll leave for now and unless i hear there is a lot of improvement i won't be coming back.

I don't like ripping into diaries but i felt that this time you needed to know he truth so this is an honest opinion of mine so you can either go 2 ways about it, either totally ignore it or try and use it to help you but you'll have to decide so it's up to you.

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Not to steal from him, but yeah that sums up what I thought.

But, to provide constructively...write better matches. Fire the useless pieces of trash. Write more realistically. Luger? Cruiserweight? Yeah, and I'm The Rock. Unoriginal, uninspiring, unimpressive. This is the diary of "uns" as it were. Vast improvements will be needed, without your friends jerking off your ego. Only to see someone else own you, or if I hear of a very strong show with very strong realistic changes...will I come back into this thread.

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I guess replying to feedback is consdiered postwhoring here, but I'm getting a bit tired of replying to each and everyone on simalier topics via PMs. So, forgive me if I'll take a moment of time to defend myself.

Some of you are posting constructive stuff, but the vast majority is delusional trash. If you want to say my stuff sucks, that's your right, but to just say "stop sucking" won't inspire me to book things the way you'd like. In all of these posts I've only picked up a few times that anyone's spent the time coming up with actual incidents of things they don't like.

1. The match issue.

Yes, I don't write long matches, but does that need to be reiterated half a dozen times? To me diaries are about writing plotlines the way you'd like, not writing my dream matches out. I don't like B.S., so if a match doesn't have anything important in it I see no reason to write the whole thing out. This is WWE. You know what you're going to see in these matches. Does it matter a ton to you if Hogan works over sombody's elbow or their knee?

2. Don't hire old guys.

In a diary I don't relie on the matches they'd do. As a matter of fact I honestly enjoy their matches on T.V., but my main reason for using them is their characters. Some people like to hire a bunch of flippy floppy guys, which is why I joke about London. My prefrence is ex-WCW guys.

3. Change the format of stuff.

I agree. I just haven't thought of where to add color and the other stuff yet.

4. Luger in the Cruiserweight division.

I didn't like Jacquline in the division. I did like Chavo Classic. Incase you've forgotten, WWE is currently treating the title like a joke. Luger getting a shot is something that could happen. I know it'd entertain me, so I'm booking it.

5. Holding off on posting a show and post whoring.

I held off on posting it because I was going out, and I remembered that I forgot to add something at the last second. I certainly hope that none of you post incomplete shows just to stay on schedule. And, my "postwhoring" was simply a result of me trying to respond to different people's feelings on this, while being unaware that the unwritten rules forbid repling so often. Guys, I didn't know. Get over yourselves. It's not like that makes me the world's worst person. I assumed that if I replied to all of these complaints as they were posted this would be post whoring so I didn't. There's no need to keep harping on something that I stopped doing as soon as I learned that it is a "faux-pas" here.

6. Promos.

I can think of one example of where I could have described more to make it work for some. I'll keep in mind that you like hearing everyone's tone each time.

Now that I've replied to the stuff that isn't flamebait and flames, let's see if some of you stick to on topic stuff in the future. Some suggestion for matches and formatting, two of my more maligned points would be espescially welcome.

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I'm enjoying this.

I like the way you've handled yourself in all this, but that's not what's important. What's important is the diary, and nothing else.

Now, let's start with the backstory. It was decent stuff, and it was surprising to see the nWo invading Smackdown!. I didn't quite see that coming as I was reading it. I just expected for you to do what quite a bit of people do in their diaries, and immediately insert themselves into it. That was a good move not to. While I'm not quite sure of why you brought Lex Luger and Buff Bagwell back, it was interesting nonetheless.

The first show was pretty good in my opinion. I don't really think that matches matter that much either, but I can understand why some people think they do. However, if you want to write your matches that way, then so be it.

Now, onto the one negative. I absolutely hate the idea of Lex Luger being a cruiserweight. Sorry, I just can't picture it. But, before I judge, I'll wait to see where you go with it, although I probably won't like the direction of it.

I enjoyed reading your promos. Maybe there was just a bit TOO much nWo for the first debut show, but it got the point across quite well.

You have a good thing going here, and shouldn't let other readers discourage you from writing it. I will definently be coming back and reading this, as I've found it entertaining and well worthy of my time. Goodluck.

Nash could have sold better. But if he avoided getting injured, consider this match a success.

LOL. That was a good way to get that over, instead of using EWR's version of it.

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